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in silence
the saving secret was hid
beneath a lid of automatic hope

through crystal distance
you bled in sweetness
drank your fill
i fell ill
Honesty - a pungent breath
arrested my lungs
putrid with Lies
whose cologne has faded

shells were cathedrals
under your delicate foot
under your cloak
i could not look
shook was i
by your soundless sigh

tremor, valor pasted on the wall
to mock
martyrs or saints
pallor, in silence
the saving secret was hid.

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the saving secret
sumalangitnawa
10/23/01
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the happy poems are on a floppy disk at home.
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keen Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2001   Writer
shells were cathedrals
under your delicate foot

exquisite. uniqueness sparkles softly through this piece. imagery translates to emotional projection rather than through the bluntness of explanation.

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skyOrange Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2001

and all i could do is sigh.
~haaaay.
the poem sounds heavy with the kept secret.
breathe out. take truths in. release.


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ammegand Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2001   Interface Designer
,the happy poems are on a floppy disk at home. '
I like that. :) (Smile)
the ingestion aspect is terrific.
I think i could say more, but i feel really crazy today, much of what you have written is like what I am feeling..

Great improvisors are like priests. They are thinking only of their god.
- Stephane Grappelli
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lustrum Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2001   Writer
i see you still have things that must be remonstrated in text before they are resolved.
onward! t'ward arrows sharpened, swift!

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faithwalker Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2001  Student Photographer
A moving work that is definitively Mari. Elegance wrapped in darkness. Sorrow scratched into hearts that read this.

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jsenn Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2001
With the most delicate gesture I lifted the gauze curtain surrounding this room. "in silence" is a most powerful first line and demanded reverence. Then I see it is self berating and I float into the sigh and crystal distance to listen to your heart. "your soundless sigh" the tremor, valor, pallor, oh Mari, much thought "in silence" wrapped your honest heart in a saving secret which does you no good.

Joy
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meglocrush Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2001
i am always jealous of your words.

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inennui Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2001
This has some extremely nice reflexive imagery.

Was Lies purposely capitalized to contrast Honesty?

I ask because I don't like to assume typos.

Interesting use of images again. I think I will read more.
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